Welcome to the Citadel, Brutus! Thanks for your subs.
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Again, welcome to the Citadel! Hope to see more from you, and to comment on your completed sub soon! Go to Comment
In like with what Echo and Val said, in a lot of ways this is a slightly more elaborate divine template for a pantheon rather than a fully fleshed out one. But as is, I find it both useful and creative. Go to Comment
I think I expected this to be made from an actual carapace. From reading the sub, I gather it's supposed to be nonmechanized armor in an era of mechanized armors? That makes it kind of neat, and the details work well. Go to Comment
I guess I don't get why they would shed their coats in the winter? Wouldn't they need them the most then? The actual shedding I approve, because it's neat. The story snippet at the end is also good. Go to Comment
In theory, any map created by a cartogramancer can be used for appropriate spells for as long as it lasts. Rather than time be the limitation on an instantly created map, I made it accuracy. Go to Comment
Great response, thanks for the suggestions axlerowes.
I wrote most of the spells as they came to me and organized them later. I think a number of them are essentially varities of one another. I'll consider reorganizing and/or synthesize some of the spells.
I'll see if I can flesh out and explain the Mountweazel more.
Hadn't thought about maps at that small a scale. I think I'm geared mostly toward the geographical sorts of maps, but that's an interesting idea to explore.
I considered the timeliness of maps. Like perhaps being able to see the movements of an event that happened a week or even a century before. As for time travel, I feel like it may be out of my intended scope. But then, historical maps are a pretty prominent portion of cartography... It's something I'll have to consider.
My tendency towards subs like these are to provide broad ideas. I'm terrible when it comes to mechanics. :P I saw someone out in the Interwebs created a D&D 3.5 Prestige Class cartogramancer with some mechanics, but they essentially limit the spells to what I called a casting map. If you have suggestions for mechanics, either system-specific or otherwise, I'd be curious.
Again, thanks for the constructive comments. Much obliged! Go to Comment
Limitations would certainly need to be thoroughly defined for in-game use. I would guess an standard AoE spell like an Acid Spray or somesuch would have to have strict limitations for use on a casting map - perhaps the volume of acid would remain the same, so spread out over an area like a marketplace might only cause a rain of irritation on folks, clearing the streets but not doing any HP damage. Go to Comment