A fine idea. Reading this makes me think about how I actually vote on subs. I think writing subs like this is a challenge for some (read: me), as some (I) tend to springboard from "fluff" to "stuff". A worthy challenge.
Welcome to the Citadel, Brutus! Thanks for your subs.
Just a heads up about our little operation. There's a few things we always want to see in subs: playability, detailed descriptions, reasonable backstories, good grammar. Punctuation and grammar is a *must* with us. I suggest running your sub through a spellchecker before you post it (there's one on the submission page, if you don't feel like using your word processor). I'd like to talk to you about your content, but honestly I'm afraid I can't read it due to lack of punctuation and spelling :) Start by running that sucker through a spellchecker, and we'll go from there.
A great example of a a plot can be found in Manfred's "To Die For Love." Perhaps that will give you a good idea on how a plot sub should look.
Again, welcome to the Citadel! Hope to see more from you, and to comment on your completed sub soon! Go to Comment
In like with what Echo and Val said, in a lot of ways this is a slightly more elaborate divine template for a pantheon rather than a fully fleshed out one. But as is, I find it both useful and creative. Go to Comment
I think I expected this to be made from an actual carapace. From reading the sub, I gather it's supposed to be nonmechanized armor in an era of mechanized armors? That makes it kind of neat, and the details work well. Go to Comment