Interesting. I think the story really illustrates your inspiration: the Grand Hero who comes charging in against the Undead Lord, waving a sword and shouting the names of his gods. I like that aspect, the corruption of (blindly naive) good.
As for its actual magic effects, it seems almost mundane from a necromancy standpoint. But that doesn't bother me much, as I like the story a lot. Khalran seems a very practical sort of lich, which I can appreciate. Go to Comment
Kindred spirits, to a degree. Followers of the Way of Divine Wealth might see the usury Priests of Mammon practice as stifling commerce through excessive debts, though someone would praise the practice. They would also probably suggest charging a fee for usage of the churches, or at least setting up a shop or two within. Go to Comment
This has a nice, classic feel to it. I can envision this as a nice, low-mid level quest for a party. The detail you provide are very nice, but loose enough that it could be adapted for any setting (e.g., instead of a Taoist temple, it's an elven shrine that some sylvan elf clan is attacking). For a random-word sub, you've put together something very clean and usable. Go to Comment
The 1973 classic "Blacula" was on the other night. The title reminds, naturally, of that film.
They sound almost comical in appearance to me, begging for blood with their sideways, toothy smiles. Basically a humanoid hagfish vampire. I don't think anyone's made quite that combination before, so kudos to you. Go to Comment
Ditto to what Caesar said. While it may be an "ode" to classic fight scenes, it's not particularly interesting or different from that. What can make it more interesting? What makes it unique? Go to Comment