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The Redheaded Corpse
Plots  (Event)   (Single-Storyline)
Dozus's comment on 2012-12-08 03:48 PM
This has a nice, classic feel to it. I can envision this as a nice, low-mid level quest for a party. The detail you provide are very nice, but loose enough that it could be adapted for any setting (e.g., instead of a Taoist temple, it's an elven shrine that some sylvan elf clan is attacking). For a random-word sub, you've put together something very clean and usable. Go to Comment
Ariel Lorette
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Dozus's comment on 2012-12-14 09:39 AM
Well-written, this reminds me of some dark comic book character for some reason. As SE said, she is very powerful for a teenager, but the writing's enough to keep me interested. Go to Comment
The Noble Expertise of Creating the Remaining Organism
Society/ Organizations  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Regional)
Dozus's comment on 2012-12-03 08:40 AM
Clever. It does remind one of some of those 19th and early 20th century artistic societies. But with more corpses. Go to Comment
Non-Euclidean Architecture: Part 2
Systems  (Architectural)   (Specific)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-30 04:52 AM
Very nice! It does boggle the mind, but you explain it well enough to encourage usage.

Bonus points to someone who effectively creates a non-euclidian monster for a campaign. Go to Comment
Hagula
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-28 04:43 AM
The 1973 classic "Blacula" was on the other night. The title reminds, naturally, of that film.

They sound almost comical in appearance to me, begging for blood with their sideways, toothy smiles. Basically a humanoid hagfish vampire. I don't think anyone's made quite that combination before, so kudos to you. Go to Comment
Rasp's Elixir
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-26 06:06 AM
Interesting take on stronger zombies. I wonder what might happen to a vampire who drank the stuff. Would he try to suck the steel from armor? Would it give him iron fangs? Go to Comment
Corpsemaker
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-26 06:02 AM
Gross. I like the imagery of a giant, armed worm crawling about, adding more dead to itself.

You mention necromancers making use of corpsemakers. Are they exclusively artificial undead, or can these creatures be naturally occurring? Go to Comment
Duty Shrines
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2012-12-01 11:07 AM
You know, I had actually intended #2 here to be the standard: shrines are used but once, and are then merely stones. Never did state that, though, huh? Go to Comment
Duty Shrines
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2013-03-04 06:43 AM
It was inspired by the Deus Ex Machina that made Aerex Matare a ranger in AuR. Go to Comment
Psuedo-Imaginary Dinosaurs
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-25 10:23 PM
Whoa, mindf**k. Psychic ghost dinosaurs? What's not to love? Go to Comment
Cascade Martial Arts
Systems  (Combat/ Warfare)   (General)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-26 02:27 PM
This is a worthy attempt to blend Street Fighter into the post-modern setting in a balanced, realistic way. Praiseworthy. Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
Plots  (Travel)   (Encounter)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-20 07:29 AM
Ditto to what Caesar said. While it may be an "ode" to classic fight scenes, it's not particularly interesting or different from that. What can make it more interesting? What makes it unique? Go to Comment
What kind of Moonquakes????(A tale of Mysantia)
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-18 04:46 PM
Not too bawdy at all! I like this one. It's sort of humanitarian, in a giant space cetacean reproductive kind of way. I look forward to hearing more about this setting of yours. Go to Comment
The Greater Adventuring Kharmic Line of Mysantia
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-18 03:05 PM
Hm. Well, the concept seems interesting. But as a 100, I just don't get it. It begs for more background and explanation, or some examples. My suggestion is to take it out of the 100 and give some more thorough explanation. As is, I just don't know what to make of it. Go to Comment
The Greater Adventuring Kharmic Line of Mysantia
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-19 10:43 AM
Fair enough. Go to Comment
Fox's Dragon Scale Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-13 02:12 PM
Interesting. I wonder what uses a dragon would have a mortal man, but the ways of dragons are often inscrutable. I'm sure Galafox has his reasons. Go to Comment
Camel's Hump
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-12 06:01 AM
It's interesting, though as far as some foods go, not that gross - see pate, kopi luwak, etc. A unique and colorful wine aging process, though a bit more would be interesting. Who first started making camel hump wine? Where is it popular? Do most people know how it's made? It seems in a steppe/desert environment, it wouldn't be all that rare, since people eat camels all the time. Aside from its aging process, what makes it so sought-after? Go to Comment
Ashes Falling from the Sky
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-07 06:25 AM
Nice atmospheric piece. Go to Comment
Sealed City of Roastone
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-08 12:24 PM
Lost dwarven colony? I love it. I'm sure there are plenty of other possible explanations too - I'll have to go to my own mines to find one. Go to Comment
Opprimere
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Dozus's comment on 2012-10-30 01:36 PM
It's not a new idea per se, but it's well-written. I like it. Go to Comment
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