More cat people than I could ever have come up with Nyan Girl made me laugh. Go to Comment

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A very clever detention center. I like the thought you've put into how it would operate.

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Yep, definitely needs some cohesiveness to bring this idea together. I think the flesh is actually there, just needs some bones on it. Go to Comment

Love it. As exotic as mounts get. Go to Comment

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Put that sucker over a lead-rich vein and you've got a natural musket ball manufactory. Go to Comment

Oh, I like this one. They are on face a space zombie, but the depth and characterization make it something different entirely.

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Very nice idea! Quite believable and, as axlerowes pointed out, we get everything we need to know in 100 words.

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I don't think it's bad, really. I just don't quite know what to do with it. For one, my Kobaldi is a little rusty, so interpreting what it all means requires some inferencing. For another, I like to have something to hang my gaming hat on - a plot or some other thing that suggests how I can implement it into a game or storyline.

As is, I think it does better as a stub. But I think it does have potential to be subbified with a little more scaffolding and support. Go to Comment

Very nice. I like the "chop suey" kung fu feel blended with the CthuluTech.

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A fine foundation. I can envision a lot springing from this.

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A fine idea. Reading this makes me think about how I actually vote on subs. I think writing subs like this is a challenge for some (read: me), as some (I) tend to springboard from "fluff" to "stuff". A worthy challenge.

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Striking imagery.

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Like Robot Wars, but with fantasy sentients. It's a good thing.

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This seems more like a stub than a sub, not because of its length but its genericalness. Nothing really sets it apart from any other acropolis.

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Eminently useful.

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I like the plot. I'm picturing the Usurper as a Dick Dastardly, wringing gloved hands as boulders seem to appear from nowhere in the town.

How does one aim an invisible trebuchet?

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Welcome to the Citadel, Brutus! Thanks for your subs.

Just a heads up about our little operation. There's a few things we always want to see in subs: playability, detailed descriptions, reasonable backstories, good grammar. Punctuation and grammar is a *must* with us. I suggest running your sub through a spellchecker before you post it (there's one on the submission page, if you don't feel like using your word processor). I'd like to talk to you about your content, but honestly I'm afraid I can't read it due to lack of punctuation and spelling :) Start by running that sucker through a spellchecker, and we'll go from there.

A great example of a a plot can be found in Manfred's "To Die For Love." Perhaps that will give you a good idea on how a plot sub should look.

Again, welcome to the Citadel! Hope to see more from you, and to comment on your completed sub soon! Go to Comment

Great idea. It reminds me of reading randomly generated history in Dwarf Fortress. A really easy way to generate the background for a place. Go to Comment