Ahhh, so the magic of the arrow acts as a retarding effect on whomever is touching it as well. That's a really interesting idea. If the effect also applies to the speed of the arrow's flight, then that could also neatly account for the reduced damage. Either way, this is a really nifty concept.
To address the time limit on this quest: it appeared to me that the limit was only there to aid in the creation process. The general concept, appearance and all that jazz can indeed be done in 3 minutes. However, there didn't seem to be a limit on the time we could take to polish it up for submission (something that Pariah also commented on in the quest thread). Perhaps I was confused in this area?
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In the hands of a skilled necromancer, I wonder if the flute could manifest new powers? Also, while I understand that it was taken from a banshee, does that mean that all banshees carry an item like this that gives them their power? Or was it created by some other being? Overall, a compelling item.
Love this gun. I imagine that one would feel the full weight of their new responsibility the moment they picked it up, as heavy as it is. If you could clean up the first paragraph a little, that would help (e.g. "Piece of Moradin" instead of "Peace of Moradin", and it looks like you're missing a word in the first sentence somewhere). Would this gun accept a bearer of a different race, as long as he was acting in the interests of the dwarves? Or is this a dwarf-only thing?
I rather like this one. For the sake of identifying it, however, I would probably add a small thing to the Appearance section. Perhaps "Sparky's" initials or family crest etched into the blade somewhere. Otherwise, it's possible that the haliberd could have been lost or stolen sometime during Howard's service and he wouldn't have known the difference.
An interesting twist, though I would like the effect to be a little less random. I also wonder how exactly one "uses" the effect. There doesn't seem to be a command word -- simply grabbing it seems to be enough -- but how is it triggered? By anger, fear? Either way, very nice backstory, and I also appreciate that you used a hammer. There are simply not enough magic hammers around!
A staff of nevermelting ice is already pretty dang cool, so adding in dragon lore just ices the cake for me. I would like to know a little more about the item's creation, and the lore section could be cleaned up a bit, but other than that this is a great sub. Well done!
This is definitely a solid, believable character. The only thing that jarred with me was how anyone could perceive such a competent figure to be a half-wit -- shouldn't his position with the military or with the Church be enough to dispell that? I also wish I knew a bit more about his goals & motivations, dreams, fears, etc. Those little things that help bring an NPC to life. His attitudes, skillset and history, however, are very well done.
I agree -- splendidly done. The plot hooks are good enough to provide fuel for a mini campaign of sorts. I would love to see a party remain loyal to him throughout though, and work to find a cure for his paranoia even as he has them hunted through the hills.
I have a druid in my group who often spurns buying rations at the towns or cities she comes across, preferring instead to forage. This would be an extremely nasty surprise, especially when she ventures into stranger and stranger lands, encountering all sorts of fruit she's never seen before . . .
For my purposes, I'd probably make the "fruit" not deadly in and of itself, but merely a powerful sleeping agent. Otherwise . . . well, my party's average will save isn't all that great and I'd rather not achieve a TPK. Yet.
A hauntingly beautiful flower. I would love to see more on the magical, alchemical, or necromatic uses for such a flower, but that would really be like adding icing to an already superb submission. The reproductive cycle is still a little implausible to my mind -- it would make more sense for the flowers to offer something that attracts the ravens & crows back to the battlefield, so that the seeds may be deposited directly and have a much better chance of success. Other than that, well done!