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Helms Havoc
Items  (Armor)   (Cursed)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-20 10:52 PM
I am unsure why anyone would wear this helmet, unless it had a powerful magic aura, perhaps? Either way, it needs to give some sort of bonus, at least initially, or the wearer will discard it for something better. Or, this is just a thought, it is impossible to remove once you put it on. I like addicting magic items, it will be good once you touch it up a little.
The backstory is good also, but maybe you could give more info about the god who made it. Go to Comment
Axtrami
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-20 11:21 PM
I enjoyed the Glass shifting crazies from the beginning, and this tops off a great creation. It meshes very well with the tone and the style of the other pieces, and actually makes a lot of sense. It seems that someone like Axtrami might change his name so that he could be worshipped by multiple organizations, but that's just an opinion. Go to Comment
The Lohra
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Swamp)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-08 11:44 AM
Just curious, who are the prettiest demons now? This definitely makes a good twist on the classic "child eating monster." I am confused why they are so easily manipulated, though, is it part of their punishment? Go to Comment
The Golden Snake
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-06 11:41 PM
I can't find the submission, but I was inspired by one regarding a copper wyrm, or something along those lines. Go to Comment
The Golden Snake
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-08 10:42 AM
Updated: I re-worked my whole submission for clarity (it was needed), and I put a few more specifics on how I envisioned the animation process to be. I also figured out a way around the melt-the-gold-down procedure, but I am afraid that I did not properly explain it. The idea was to use a heat metal charm of some sort so that the gold would melt itself down, then rise back up as a snake. I was also unsure whether to quote Moonhunter's comment or simply to reference it in my submission Go to Comment
The Golden Snake
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-10-08 10:48 AM
Well, the idea is that the snakes themselves are amazingly weak, but a pair of fangs in the throat is a pair of fangs in the throat (especially when they are pumping poison.) Go to Comment
Anodyne Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-27 10:58 PM
Imagine a PC getting killed in the street and not knowing it, that would be hilarious Go to Comment
Tryvaard's Longspear
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-27 11:18 PM
narsty weapon, it has a good ability with a drawback that could provide an interesting plotline Go to Comment
Gloves of Emotion
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-27 11:31 PM
love it, its a very cool concept to turn something that was designed for good into something a gang lord uses Go to Comment
Iacon
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-25 11:31 AM
I am torn on this submission. Is it possible to give a little clearer explanation of why the two religions went to war? Did they actually disagree over a certain event or did they just hate each other in the first place? Go to Comment
The D'Karr and the Karr
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Underground)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-23 07:50 PM
I'm not sure where I got the name D'Karr from, if I accidently stole it, sorry. Go to Comment
The D'Karr and the Karr
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Underground)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-23 08:16 PM
Updated: I wanted to tell a bit more about the D'Karr government, and how to creep your PC's out, if they've seen albino cannibals before in stuff like the Time Machine book. Go to Comment
GAHZZAHGK, god of Inanity
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-11-26 01:05 PM
I like it, perhaps you could add more specific tales of his exploits? You could have some fun thinking of all the crazy stuff that the god (or the prophet) does to prevent some important event. Go to Comment
Sinful Concoctions of the Mind and Body
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Villanous)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-16 04:59 PM
One Step Ahead (Prophet’s Booze, The Cursed Leaf)

Rumored to be the ground-up leaf of a plant that feeds off the dead body of some twisted god, One Step Ahead provides the imbiber with limited knowledge of the future immediately before it happens. This affect lasts for a little under an hour, then proceeds to show the affected person visions farther and farther out into the future for a few more minutes. After this, all but the strongest fall into a coma of sorts, envisioning things in blurry focus that range from past events from the futures of alternate universes. These comas are usually temporary, lasting a few hours, but long term or even permanent comas are possible. While under the influence, the user sees “ghosts” of things about to happen, and seems twitchy, with vastly dilated pupils. The drug is favored by those who value their reflexes and luck, many rouges who claim to be able to rob some of the most heavily guarded castles in under an hour rely on One Step Ahead to bolster their chances of success. The name “prophet’s booze” comes from the drug’s liquid form, which is used by many seers to predict anything from dangers facing a customer to the fates of kingdoms. The substance is not very addicting, but it often does irreparable damage to the mind and soul when used by a hopeful thief or seer too often. Go to Comment
Urn Beast
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-25 11:36 AM
He he, I can just imagine fighting that thing, struggling to whack it while it swirls and burns around you. Its a good idea to give an anti-possession method that's available to the PC's Go to Comment
The Remover of Inconvenient Things
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-11-29 03:09 AM
I read this book, the character is really cool. He doesn't kill for money as much as he kills for his own designs, and he has a secret Moon Hunter doesn't mention. Go to Comment
The Remover of Inconvenient Things
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-11-30 12:10 AM
I was not attempting to undermine your submission, I was merely suggesting another method for utilizing the character you presented. He is useful either way. Go to Comment
Choke Horror
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Other)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-16 05:55 PM
I really like it, but do the creatures resemble humanoid bodies? The creature overall makes sense, but more information on their social interaction (hierarchy, etc.) would make it better. Go to Comment
Centipede Nails
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Demagogue's comment on 2006-08-25 12:06 PM
Great idea, one possible application is for a thief to sneak the legs under a chest, and then let it walk out of a heavily guarded room on its own accord. Go to Comment
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