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The Rephatians
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Local)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-05-14 11:39 PM
I just wanted to give you encouragement and hold my vote at the same time. The format's fine. Go to Comment
The Rephatians
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Local)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-05-14 11:59 PM
Ok, I still like the sub, and the extra detail you have given it is good, the reasons are plausible and the solution the residents find to the food problem is downright creepy. My favorite caste is the transcendents, I like the idea of shadowy "superbeings" that exist in this savage society.
My question revolves around your use of the word "prey" for referring to the caste's aquisition of food. It seems to imply that the upper classes hunt the lower classes, instead of a more organised system of slaughter associated with the cattle-like food caste. If it is a free-for-all in the eating department, then it is very difficult to maintain a civilized society, making the Rephatians less dangerous to other civilizations. They would likely be locked in tribal warfare for most of their existance, unless they managed to make an uneasy peace long enough to capture some enemies for nourishment.
If your use of "prey" doesn't mean hunting, then what does it mean? Go to Comment
Paradigm Shift and Magic
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-04-19 09:21 PM
It makes a lot of sense, I would especially like to explore the transcendent phase of magic. In reality, magic is a substitute for technology in most games, and will function similarly. Good idea, especially well realized. Go to Comment
The thirst for return
Plots  (Hired)   (Campaign)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-04-06 10:22 PM
My personal feeling on a sacrifice is that the sacrificial victim must be killed in a ritual fashion, leading the wizard to use various methods of non-lethal force. Just an idea. I am not voting because I agree with Wulfhere, you might want to back off of this one and get some feedback before you submit it again. Go to Comment
Traveler Spirits
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Other)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-04-04 08:56 PM
I think that this submission is an extremely good idea, but was presented in a very confusing way. I would have put the Death and Resurrection section first, then the description of the traveler spirits. As I stated before though, the idea is solid and a clever restriction of the ability to raise the dead. Go to Comment
ACME Exploding Barrel and Crate Company
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (World Wide)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-28 10:56 PM
Brilliantly simple and amusing, what better way to take down and enemy stronghold than to load one of these into an improvised catapult and let fly! They could also be used in robbery... that would be cool. Go to Comment
The Mortuary Hotline
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-04-07 06:06 PM
Great job, betting on death! Its a very sneaky way of killing someone. Go to Comment
The Death Throes Bullet
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-26 06:09 PM
It might have an effect similar to electroshock therapy, but since it is a one time thing, it's unlikely. Go to Comment
The Truth War
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-25 11:45 AM
This is a very good idea, but you probably want to go over it for some grammar errors (copy it into a word document or something). Other than that, I liked the way it smacked of the formation of the Nazi's and the Red Army. Go to Comment
The Virednith
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-21 06:53 PM
This weapon also struck me as a magical nuke. I am confused as to whether the trapped demon souls power it, or rather its absorbance of outside magical energy powers it. Other than that, very good job on the sub and its plot ties Go to Comment
Drostan the Bard
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-21 10:50 PM
This character exists far too often in our modern society to be ignored, great job of presenting it. One thing though, I'm confused as to where the magic that the group wields comes from. Is it an inborn talent? A demonic gift? Go to Comment
Orthacarium
Items  (Materials)   (Villanous)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-18 12:12 PM
I am confused as to whether the material occurs naturally, or is created through some vile energy seeping into ordinary metal. I also echo the same suggestions posted above, but I do think your applications of this strange metal are very creative. Go to Comment
Of divine Life and Death
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-21 09:37 PM
hopefully, this all ties together at some point, because I'm very confused Go to Comment
The Cannibals
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Regional)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-16 06:02 PM
All the sane members of the army were too devoted to the Bishops orders to ever accept another prophet, so they were all killed. At that point, there was no codification of rules, so they were not all necessarily eaten. Looking back on the submission, I have to agree, I need to think of a better cause for the insanity; thanks for adding the text. Go to Comment
The Dawn Of Avarice
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-08 08:12 PM
I do like the world-encompassing nature of this conflict, but I think that for a truly great sub you need to add more detail about the nations and the important people within them. Perhaps, you could start a scroll and let people brainstorm about various aspects of the war, in line with what Wulfhere wrote. Go to Comment
The Tower of Ash
Dungeons  (Other)   (Style)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-06 06:11 PM
I like it, the imagery is very good and the reasons behind the tower are excellent. Go to Comment
The Lady Leshach
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-06 06:29 PM
It would be very hard for players to adjust to the fact that the guard outside the tavern is a zombie, and that's what makes it so interesting. There's no reason that the dead have to kill the living, I like it. Go to Comment
Star of Rage
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-01 07:15 PM
This is a very useful and balanced creature that would be feasible in the natural world. I imagine that a good tactic for these stars would be to equip suicide warriors with them. This would be a similar tactic used by the vikings, who sent warriors in who believed that when they died, they would feast eternally in the hall of their god. Criminals could also be used in a similar fashion, come to think of it. Go to Comment
The Cursing Jar
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Villanous)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-01 07:03 PM
Evil, evil, evil. The effect is almost untracable, but you do have to pay a significant price. Given the history, it sounds like the Jar itself feeds the user's desire for revenge. Go to Comment
The Fairy Castle
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
Demagogue's comment on 2007-03-01 08:47 PM
Ug and wow. Full credit for the disturbing aspects, and the mystical aspect of the innocent-looking child's playhouse. It does seem like a dungeon, but it works fine as an item. Is there a special way to destroy it? just curious Go to Comment
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