Ok, I still like the sub, and the extra detail you have given it is good, the reasons are plausible and the solution the residents find to the food problem is downright creepy. My favorite caste is the transcendents, I like the idea of shadowy "superbeings" that exist in this savage society.
My question revolves around your use of the word "prey" for referring to the caste's aquisition of food. It seems to imply that the upper classes hunt the lower classes, instead of a more organised system of slaughter associated with the cattle-like food caste. If it is a free-for-all in the eating department, then it is very difficult to maintain a civilized society, making the Rephatians less dangerous to other civilizations. They would likely be locked in tribal warfare for most of their existance, unless they managed to make an uneasy peace long enough to capture some enemies for nourishment.
If your use of "prey" doesn't mean hunting, then what does it mean? Go to Comment
It makes a lot of sense, I would especially like to explore the transcendent phase of magic. In reality, magic is a substitute for technology in most games, and will function similarly. Good idea, especially well realized. Go to Comment
My personal feeling on a sacrifice is that the sacrificial victim must be killed in a ritual fashion, leading the wizard to use various methods of non-lethal force. Just an idea. I am not voting because I agree with Wulfhere, you might want to back off of this one and get some feedback before you submit it again. Go to Comment
I think that this submission is an extremely good idea, but was presented in a very confusing way. I would have put the Death and Resurrection section first, then the description of the traveler spirits. As I stated before though, the idea is solid and a clever restriction of the ability to raise the dead. Go to Comment
Brilliantly simple and amusing, what better way to take down and enemy stronghold than to load one of these into an improvised catapult and let fly! They could also be used in robbery... that would be cool. Go to Comment
This is a very good idea, but you probably want to go over it for some grammar errors (copy it into a word document or something). Other than that, I liked the way it smacked of the formation of the Nazi's and the Red Army. Go to Comment
This weapon also struck me as a magical nuke. I am confused as to whether the trapped demon souls power it, or rather its absorbance of outside magical energy powers it. Other than that, very good job on the sub and its plot ties Go to Comment
This character exists far too often in our modern society to be ignored, great job of presenting it. One thing though, I'm confused as to where the magic that the group wields comes from. Is it an inborn talent? A demonic gift? Go to Comment
I am confused as to whether the material occurs naturally, or is created through some vile energy seeping into ordinary metal. I also echo the same suggestions posted above, but I do think your applications of this strange metal are very creative. Go to Comment
All the sane members of the army were too devoted to the Bishops orders to ever accept another prophet, so they were all killed. At that point, there was no codification of rules, so they were not all necessarily eaten. Looking back on the submission, I have to agree, I need to think of a better cause for the insanity; thanks for adding the text. Go to Comment
I do like the world-encompassing nature of this conflict, but I think that for a truly great sub you need to add more detail about the nations and the important people within them. Perhaps, you could start a scroll and let people brainstorm about various aspects of the war, in line with what Wulfhere wrote. Go to Comment
It would be very hard for players to adjust to the fact that the guard outside the tavern is a zombie, and that's what makes it so interesting. There's no reason that the dead have to kill the living, I like it. Go to Comment
This is a very useful and balanced creature that would be feasible in the natural world. I imagine that a good tactic for these stars would be to equip suicide warriors with them. This would be a similar tactic used by the vikings, who sent warriors in who believed that when they died, they would feast eternally in the hall of their god. Criminals could also be used in a similar fashion, come to think of it. Go to Comment
Ug and wow. Full credit for the disturbing aspects, and the mystical aspect of the innocent-looking child's playhouse. It does seem like a dungeon, but it works fine as an item. Is there a special way to destroy it? just curious Go to Comment
Not every prophecy needs to be meaningful to effect a game. In the Lord Dunsany play, The Golden Doom, a child's scrawl has an entire kingdom struggling to puzzle out what sinister prophecy it portends.