Perhaps it could be a bit more in appearance than simply a "Masterwork Violin"; perhaps the strings of the violin are bone white, or for something more subtle it perhaps the violin always feel cold, not ice cold, just a little cold. Go to Comment
The transition to the quote is rough, and at first I was unaware it even was a quote; if I were you I'd put the quote in quotations, or italicise it, just so the reader knows they're reading a quote.
Other than that, it's a pretty interesting idea, I especially enjoy how it tracks ships, with countless telescopes and radars crammed into it. Go to Comment
Well, instead of focusing on the noise, you could instead focus on the glow, and perhaps the air becomes increasingly hot and humid as the energy level increases; hair stands up on peoples heads, metal conducting items might pull some sparks of energy from Sila'Khrysath's maw ect. Go to Comment
The player characters are contracted to steal the sceptre of shrinking (such an item could be very useful, or at least fetch a high price), so they have to pose as nobles and attend one of the 'games'. Go to Comment
The ochre sands stretch for miles around. Something kicks up the dust. It's a yak. A desert-yak. It ambles slowly, nuzzling the ground for the low-growing shrubs. The ranger freezes. "Stay very still," he warns. "Don't move at all."
"What is it?" you ask, breathlessly.
"It's the most dangerous creature in the whole Ocadian desert. And it's about to eat that yak..."