"The Orcish Occupation took more than three hundred years." This right here was my favorite part. It blindsided me, and makes the entire submission utterly reek of realism. A simple, expedient solution is adopted "for the duration", and ends up changing the entire society when the duration is about 4-5 generations.
Well, I think that the Capn. and MoonHunter happened to read a different version of this than what I am...As it is, it seems quite established, with plot hooks galore, yet not extremely specific to a setting. I like it. 4/5
Remember, long doesn't always mean better, and short doesn't always mean bad. Go to Comment
Wow, this is an old one. I remember reading it a while back, and I agree with Strolen in that the creator definitely needs a way to get out if entrapped in his own prison. Holding vote is 3.5/5 until/unless modified. Good idea, just needs a bit more work. Go to Comment
Gah! Reading this plot reminds me of an old movie about this bookie for a mobster, who was dating this girl who claimed to be his daughter, but actually wasn't, and so he went to the mobster to ask her hand in marriage, but then the mobster's actual daughter and he were like, "Who are you?" and things went nuts, and then it came out that the not-daughter actually WAS the mobsters daughter, and it all was a huge mess until the movie ended, when things finally came together.
If anyone happens to remember that movie, I'd say it's a good one to watch for how this plot should feel when played out. Nice job ephe!
Edit: I finally remembered the movie. It's Oscar, the 1991 comedy film starring Silvester Stallone. Amazingly halarious movie. Go to Comment
Without being entirely aware of your thaumatech rune system, I'm not entirely sure such a system would allow runes inscribed on the leather to affect the capabilities of the rat. Perhaps more expensive versions have the runes for enhanced teeth tattooed on the rat's skin instead? (tattooing a rat would be a bit hard to do, thus more expensive) Go to Comment
While the author of this isn't around anymore, it's still an example of a submission that, while definitely not uber-quality, has enough to be inserted into a campaign or world with relative ease. Point in fact, it seems to me that we should be less harsh on submissions that don't have massive gobs of content, and consider whether they are, like this one, self-contained. Go to Comment
Well, actually, if you read the Chimera Oil item he linked to, it says just a few drops makes the skin soft as clay. 30 gallons of the stuff into the water system will cause some serious funkiness. *nods* Go to Comment