Hey, I think that's perfectly alright. I remember seeing this before, way back when I didn't have an account, and by the time I got one, I forgot about it. I always liked this adventure, and now that I'm better versed in certain lores, I find it to be quite good. A nice thriller, though it might be a bit short if a GM doesn't add in extra stuff; e.g. filler.
Not bad, not bad at all. A bit cliche' with the "owner loving item obsessively", but 'tis creative about it, and a very interesting item. This would be good for bards obviously, but if not carefully controlled it might become a problem with overpowerment...But a good GM shouldn't have any problems with that sort of thing.
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Anyway, I recall reading this a long while back, and I still see it as being a quite useful item for a GM to add into a plot or scenario. I'm seeing a necromancer using this to slowly take down better and better opponents, capturing each in turn, until he has the best swordsman-zombie in the world. What a lieutenant to have, eh? Then the PCs have to fight the zombie-lieutenant, and pray that they don't get captured themselves.
Man, I love the potential of some of these old submissions... Go to Comment
I dislike the fact that any time someone hears about a religious crusade or extreme zeal, they immediately associate it with Christianity. Other religions have been just as zealous and just as warlike, some very much more so.
Rant aside, I really like this submission. He's the sort of person that does good, but the Church can't support him openly due to alienating others. There are more of these people than you might think. Go to Comment
"The Orcish Occupation took more than three hundred years." This right here was my favorite part. It blindsided me, and makes the entire submission utterly reek of realism. A simple, expedient solution is adopted "for the duration", and ends up changing the entire society when the duration is about 4-5 generations.
Well, I think that the Capn. and MoonHunter happened to read a different version of this than what I am...As it is, it seems quite established, with plot hooks galore, yet not extremely specific to a setting. I like it. 4/5
Remember, long doesn't always mean better, and short doesn't always mean bad. Go to Comment
Wow, this is an old one. I remember reading it a while back, and I agree with Strolen in that the creator definitely needs a way to get out if entrapped in his own prison. Holding vote is 3.5/5 until/unless modified. Good idea, just needs a bit more work. Go to Comment
Gah! Reading this plot reminds me of an old movie about this bookie for a mobster, who was dating this girl who claimed to be his daughter, but actually wasn't, and so he went to the mobster to ask her hand in marriage, but then the mobster's actual daughter and he were like, "Who are you?" and things went nuts, and then it came out that the not-daughter actually WAS the mobsters daughter, and it all was a huge mess until the movie ended, when things finally came together.
If anyone happens to remember that movie, I'd say it's a good one to watch for how this plot should feel when played out. Nice job ephe!
Edit: I finally remembered the movie. It's Oscar, the 1991 comedy film starring Silvester Stallone. Amazingly halarious movie. Go to Comment