I honestly find this to be a good example of a non-traditional order. After all, not all fantasy strives to be a direct replication of the Middle Ages, and this group gives some explanation and backstory to an Order that likes women, which I'm sure a number of GMs would like to include, but simply can't decide how such an order would come to exist. Go to Comment
As it stands, I agree with MJS: it's a bit too short. This is more of a sidenote that you'd toss into the histories your players are rummaging through. Some encounters, a basic layout, all that good stuff would immensely improve this. The basic concept is quite good however; I just want to see more out of it. I'll refrain from voting until it has been retooled and expanded a bit. Go to Comment
I think the way to solve val's problem would be to make it either a cursededed evil artifact, or perhaps an artifact with the blessing of the Knowledge god, whomever that might be, who negotiates with the other deities to 'lease' the souls of the faithful for a short time (in the "grand timescale"). Said souls very well might know of their death, and the pious ones would consider it their final act of service before their final reward (assuming they are informed of the terms of their stay within the book), whereas the evil ones might be scheming and plotting within the book to try and remain immortal (the means of which would be as varied as you like).
An interesting item such as this always opens up new avenues of thought and idea. Nice work sveri! Go to Comment
A bit too contemporary for a "What is the character doing?" chart. Light and funny is perfectly fine in my view, but some of those simply didn't have a feel of anything but modern filler. Go to Comment
angryscot hit it right on the head. I couldn't shake the feeling of Brave New World the entire time I read this sub. An interesting concept, and always something that gets brought up in scifi, but I very highly doubt I'll ever use it. Go to Comment
Instead of focusing on the actual titles themselves, and the fact that they're Catholic in nature, perhaps we should be looking at the fact that specific designations were/are needed for those stations within monastic orders, and create parallel titles/ranks for our own monastic orders?
Even though this is decently done, however, I must disagree with other commenters as to how useful it is. Economics states that the consumer pays for value added: what value was added here? Simply organizing such ranks together into a list with categories isn't good enough to be worthy of a write-up, in my opinion. Is there honestly nothing we can add to this to make it more than just a list of rankings? Go to Comment
This is amazing. I cannot think of a single submission that matches this one. The depth and scope of this piece, to say nothing of the amazing prose, is astounding. Kudos for you, you most definitely deserve the First-Place this piece was awarded.
Regarding inspiration and the feel of the character, I had gotten a Voldemort vibe near the end, but mostly the name that came to mind was "Hitler". Go to Comment
I find this book's actions to be quite in line with most supremacists, who aren't above harming even their own for "the greater good." I do think just copying the spells out of nearby spellbooks would be enough for the book, though eating magical items of any sort would certainly be allowable within the supremacist motif. Go to Comment
Excellent! This is simple, to the point, and perfect for its purpose. It can be dropped in just about any location, even in a more fantasy-oriented campaign (in which case the PCs are probably going to be a bit confused by the pipes if they haven't hit steamtech yet, but the players will recognize maintenance tunnels...probably). I love the simple horror of the unknown here. It's so simple and uncomplicated, yet it reeks of terror. Go to Comment
I'm impressed with this one. It steps far outside the boundaries of stereotype, while at the same time retaining the entire feel of a fantasy princess. Well, one with tusks anyway. This is an entirely plausible character and story for any world where orcs are more than just brutish monsters. Go to Comment