The head researcher killing himself reminds me of the last frame of this comic: http://community.livejournal.com/scans_daily/4611731.html
Once again, I am stunned by your mastery of prose. I really love your submissions. They're always beautiful pieces of wordcraft. Very nicely done.
Sidethought: can the creatures exist outside of the cloud bank? I would assume that certain ones couldn't, due to the nature of various realities, but others very well might. That could be an iiiiiinteresting plot hook. Woo for "The Mist". Go to Comment
As is the source: there isn't much that rivals complete and utter annihilation of millions of souls in the space of a few seconds. It's a devastatingly horrifying thought. I think Ouro captured that feel quite nicely. Go to Comment
An interesting piece of equipment, though I'm not sure it's wise to use this with anything but a one-off "Golden Army"-esque event. I can see this going way, way too far out of bounds if given anything but the tightest boundary. However, within such a context, it seems like just the thing someone would want to come up with. Go to Comment
Doom, doom cometh! Every major power needs to have a navy flagship if they have a navy. I like the feel you gave this, and I especially liked the various methods of propulsion, though for some reason I've got a nagging feeling that there's another method that could be added. Go to Comment
I gotta jump on the bandwagon here: the quantum state thing kinda threw me. It seems rather out of place with the rest of the sub. Is there not some other way to score that doesn't require something that...advanced? Not all steampunk is going to be advanced enough to know of, let alone deal with quantum states. However, most steampunk will indeed have this sort of sporting event, at minimum around the Colleges of Steamtech.
As an alternative, perhaps something along the lines of 'keep-away'? For every minute you keep possession of the ball, you gain 2 points. First team to 10 wins (longer games can be played to 20, or even be timed, with the highest scoring team winning). I'll admit, the quantum state of existing and not-existing is an interesting variant of winning conditions, but I just find it too advanced for most steampunk settings. Go to Comment
There are nowhere near enough music-related submissions on Strolen's. This is a steampunk contemporary to the Arune Spheres, and I loved both of them. Very nice work Pieh; this is the sort of background fleshing out that makes a world truly come alive. Go to Comment
Wow. Simple and brutal. I'm not sure how effective a partially hollowed blade would be though. Seems to me it would lose a bit of structural integrity after a number of hits, but meh. Easily solved with some strengthening glyphs or something similar. Go to Comment
The thing to remember, not just with thaumatech, is that any innately magical being is going to have some sort of natural anti-magic defenses, to say nothing of knowing counter-magic of their own. Rare is the daemon that doesn't know at least a bit of the magical arts, and most would tend to be able to take a full wizard in a fight. There's a good reason daemon summoning is frowned upon. Thaumatech weaponry would take a bit for them to get used to, but I wouldn't say it'd make fighting daemons a field day. Go to Comment
Bone armor in general seems to get glossed over when adventurers wear it. I would think that even though it's a show of power to some people, wearing such armor would simply frighten the general populace. "Look at that one; see those bones he wears? Only daemon-sworn wear armor like that." Heaven knows the common people like to tell stories, and how hard is it to move from daemon-slayer to daemon-collaborator? Go to Comment