I, for my part, did not contribute to such an inflated average. It is good Scras work (as all Scras work is), and is very good for a 30, but it isn't leaping over that bar to become 5 material Go to Comment
Why does this dragon have healing powers? Where did it come from, how was it born or who made it or whatever? Where did it come from? What are its habits? Are there legends that surround it? So on so on.
There is very, VERY little detail. It is an interesting idea, but what else is there to it?
How as the Enori's "innocence faded"? Why do people want to catch it so bad? Is it divine? It's unique, so where did it come from? Go to Comment
Not a big fan of transdimensional travel, but it's mostly for the reasons you have outlined, Scras- the boringness and cliche of the whole "planar" set-up.
This, I think, fits in better with the whole idea of fantasy. Go to Comment
Hate and vengeance are powerful forces. They dull the inhibitions, cloud the thoughts, and drive people to commit unspeakable acts. There are demons that reflect intense human emotion, taking shapes that best reflect the desire and experiences of their victims.