What was the reason for this resistance movement? Who was Kros Embron and why did he create the Spies? How do the Espers differ from the Spies? What are the group's rituals and practices?
This has definite potential, but it needs work. Go to Comment
Hastur?! Very nice, work, Mike, very nice indeed. I love the mythic qualities of it, and I also like that the idea of his being a "leper-king" was sort of attached to him. Humans will see what they want to see. Go to Comment
Generally I dislike having a whole zooful of werebeasts; people like to have everything from were-nematodes to were-okapis and everything in between, and I think it gets ridiculous and takes the mystery and interest out of the simple idea of the human that becomes the animal. But I love this simply because these are such well-fleshed ideas of people and clans. Go to Comment
Interesting, interesting. It has a lot of potential, and I like the bizarre description of the creatures themselves and their justifications for their actions. However, it reads very awkwardly and some parts are confusing. Also, why do they call themselves the "Dark Crusaders"? Do they culturally associate darkness with good or law or whatever? Go to Comment
The thing is, these are only very general titles, and you can't "freeze" them to one meaning. I suppose these are good if you're doing a very basic take-off of Arabic culture, but these titles have had many different meanings and placements throughout times and cultures, often simultaneously. Go to Comment
It is said by the village gray beards Of Breen, that the band of human exiles who founded their prosperous farming settelment almost a century ago,had to fight a long,savage struggle with the original inhabitants of the fertile valley;monstrous trolls that saw the new arrivals as meals, rather than as potential neighbours.After 5 long years, the humans with their superior steel weapons, drove the troll tribe into the bleak highlands and hills sourounding the valley.But as time passed, the old tale begun to become legend, rather than history and is regarded by most, as a mere story used by parents to frighten disobediant children.And yet the village leaders have always forbidden their people from wandering the hills....