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Queen Llaewyn Reborn
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 12:45 PM
Very nicely done incomplete thought 3.5/5 purely for style Go to Comment
Motive Spirits
Items  (Transports)   (Sentient)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-10 08:42 AM
Couldn't disagree more with the votes on this. Truly amazing idea,well executed.Anything you want to add only will make it more AWESOME! 5/5 Go to Comment
Infestation
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Aramax's comment on 2015-03-02 05:48 PM
Nothing to add but another 5/5! Go to Comment
Slang and Jargon Beneath the Waves: The Big Under
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-07 05:27 AM
Claustrophobic Rage syndrome , Most often found in divers,this condition can be found anywhere. The victum enters into an adrenalin filled psychosis and becomes an unstoppable killing machine(spree killer not serial). They will shun weapons other than what is around them, excluding missile weapons. They will be able to take superhuman amounts of damage and have double to triple strength. They might as well be killed, as once they calm down, they will enter into the rage again.Called "going native"

Cannibalistic Nutrition Deficiency The victim will desire to eat human flesh. They will feed on the same body part(liver, brain heart etc) Subject will develop cunning serial killer instincts . Once caught, if society needs the skills of the individual, they can be taught to just drink small amounts of human blood and raw animal organs but must be monitored carefully Called "The Chews"

Kalium induced Hoarding Complex Found most often among engineers and low level techs who handle Kalium. At first subject will steal small amounts of Kalium. The individual will have feelings of needing to keep themselves alive by stealing spare parts from either power production or oxygen making equipment. It will eventually lead to them shutting down a major component, causing a catastrophic shutdown of the involved system. Called The Takes

Agoraphobic Related Diving Complex Individual will refuse to take diving suit off. True danger to self in keeping suit shut and running out of oxygen, will be provoked to violence if you try to get him out of diving gears. Very hard to catch early, as it is common for divers to remain in their gear for a while in there off hours, early ssigns are not taking off gloves and the key here is to catch them sleeping in their gear Called "Suiting".

Kalium Induced Lycanthropy often indistinguishable from The Chews. Subject will be triggered into cunning feral behavior by an external stimulus,(lights strobing, wife yelling, kids crying. Subject will then hunt,werewolf like, in the more abandoned sections of the habitat. Subject will have no memory of behavior. Called Shark Heads Go to Comment
Slang and Jargon Beneath the Waves: The Big Under
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-06 08:59 AM
Nice start, some great ones, some not so.prob a little early in the setting for this but later obvious ones can easily be added. Not sure about the shear number of them do to gamer fatigue poss from doing this as part of a published world.again easlly trimmed at publication. 4/5 Go to Comment
Slang and Jargon Beneath the Waves: The Big Under
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-07 12:47 PM
Nyumachikku are very cool. Steampunk androids. How sentient are you making them? Ae they an underclass?soldiers? My cult will view them in 3 ways ,some will view them as abominations some will see them as angels(poss slang?) some will see them the way hinus view cows, No matter what the opinion, it will be strongly held, a source of friction between chapters! Angel Liberation Front anyone ? Go to Comment
Slang and Jargon Beneath the Waves: The Big Under
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-07 12:55 PM
Name doesnt roll off the mouth right thou ,while artistic, not sure if it would find its way into common use. Go to Comment
The Light and His Lady
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-14 09:24 AM
4/5 Fantastic creation story, despite it's "tailored' to your setting, it would make a great addition to any game as a variant myth. Love your naming pattern on both of your subs I've read. You've got a very good eye for made up nouns.Looks like I'll be reading more of your subs! Go to Comment
Xue Ren (Snow/Blood Blade Edge)
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Combative)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-05 04:22 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-14 09:09 AM
4.5 /5 Love the name Riverheart(will steal!) Depth on this one is great, my only quibble(and ,please its MINOR) is that you spent a lot of effort on the architecture, I would like to see a LOT more about the society.I really hope that you do a lot more with this, your really close to HoH territory! Wonderful!. Go to Comment
The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-14 12:09 PM
Because you'v egot such a great"start' to this I would put the cultural aspects into THIS. Go to Comment
A Grave Problem
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-04 08:07 AM
Nice little side encounter 3.5/5 Go to Comment
A Grave Problem
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-04 08:09 AM
Option 1b The family of the entombed sees the grave goods and either the authorities or the family task the adventurers w/ why this happened Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-07 11:12 AM
The 1000 yr cycle is a based on the fational that longer cycles would lead to high enough magic to at least be able to hide a great deal of the world Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 11:15 AM
I felt I needed to put the full description of the way I was using the whales to make my other subs a little more understandable at this time, totally agree that this is only 3.5 at this time, but this is going to be my primary codex page for the Stolen(Strolen) World. Go to Comment
Apocalyptic Vampires
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-03 08:10 AM
Core idea is solid, Lots of idea here to work from. But as you yourself admit its sort........lacking This to me is a textbook 3/5 Very good concept, delivered ok.although its only about 25 words away from a stub.If your really interested in doing some more work on this ,I could give a little more input. Go to Comment
Apocalyptic Vampires
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-03 08:24 AM
The main reason they are so successful is that they, attack low or no mana worlds exclusively. Going to modern worlds where vampires exist in movies and holograms. Their mages provide them with magic rings to allow them to survive on worlds like that. This also explains why their servants decay so quickly, without the necessary mana, they are imparted with only the minimum mana to exist and decay quickly. Their thralls are way more important to their hierarchy.

World with a goth subculture are of great value to them, Thralls they don't need to exert much control over and excellent sources of officers. Go to Comment
Castle Kaukenn
Dungeons  (Other)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-04 01:07 PM
Nice little sub! great back story.,love what you have on the castle. Scores well on utility and back story. 4/5 Go to Comment
The Elder Crow of the Tarlathii
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-02 06:02 PM
The whole possession thing has been done to death, HOWEVER this is a nice take on them, I particularly like the Merchant, to me , he makes the sub.Big props on the style and artistry, I think I actually would have liked it better if we had just the merchant. Not really much new territory here ,4/5 all for art Go to Comment
The Elder Crow of the Tarlathii
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-03 07:42 AM
I vote on two factors usefulness followed by art. I should have emphasized a little more how much you did a fantastic job on the art of this piece.It is also nice and short,which I like better. Illl be happy to dole out 4s to subs like this all day long. Go to Comment
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