You've got a nice submission here. I like how you added in the part about a lack of prophecies. It keeps it nice and open-ended, which can be nice. Like Dozus has already said, though, it might be better with some sort of more specific plot, so players have something to build on.
I'd recommend splitting up the submission into paragraphs that all dwell on the same subject, like MoonHunter said. It makes submissions easier to read.
Also, I think the name "Azerath" might be very similar to one used in a video game (Warcraft III, or something). While it is perfectly exceptable to make derivative names out of place names in video games, it's sort of disliked here. It's not very creative, and it can get confusing and annoying if enough people do it. Personally, I suggest you make up a more unique name. Go to Comment
Just saying, having her have that needle that's automatically unfindable is a pretty bad idea. It's like playing favorites with imaginary characters. If you're running a game with other people and they find out that the needle is just always wherever they happened not to search, they won't be impressed. I think that you'd be better off saying that it's just very well hidden in her clothes, or just taking another step and making it a magical needle. Go to Comment
This is Grey on a remote terminal.
Just wanted to say that I quite like this, and although I may not be able to get QUITE as much cooperation out of my players, this definetly inspires me to try more. Go to Comment
Two of Pinker's research assistants are working on ways to make the effect switch off after three days of continuous use or project a warning to others that the ring bearer may be infectious. Go to Comment
While I do understand where you are coming from and I can appreciate your points, I must say that my DnD group is keeping the dream alive. Yes, we do have 1.5 players who think nothing of their characterization, but the other 3.5 of us nearly sacrifice making balanced characters in favor of making them more interesting and quirky (generally settling for underpowered). Anyway, I hope that other people see this and think more about concepts and think more about making a slightly retarded half-orc cleric dedicated to Pelor than a tricked out rogue made up purely of stats and skill points. Go to Comment
Ummm forgive me if I'm wrong but if the attempted kidnapping were a prank, isn't there a very realistic chance it could turn fatal, as the PCs proceed to kill the thugs with the intention of rescuing the girl? Isn't there a ridiculously high likely hood of that in fact? It seems like that sort of situation would be instantly suspicious, because given the propensity for Adventurers on the road to use "Crossbow Diplomacy" no one would pull such a high risk low reward prank. Go to Comment
hey im new to this site but was here years ago w/ another name. anyways dont remember so im newbie by default.
Firstly, I am a sci-fi reader and I hope to meet success with my writing.
My favorite series of books are Larry Nivens RINGWORLD tetralogy (Ringworld, RingWorld Engineers, The RingWorld Throne, and RingWorlds Children)
For those that havnt read the ring world is the greatest artificial structere ever discovered.
A ring, its circumference equal to earths orbit, it is built around a sol-like star. Shadow squares halfway betwwn the ring and the sun provide 15 hours of night in a thirty hour day. 70 days equals one falan (one full rotation of ring world. The inner surface-the one exposed to the sun, is terraformed and is one millionkmwide cntrifugal force provides gravity, and rim walls 1000km high keep the atmosphere in. Population of RNH(ringworld native hominids)
estimated in the trillions.
The origins of who built it and why are too sticky to get into. But the ringworld , millions of years ago, was populated bt A race called Pak Protectors. Protectors are ancestors of all homo sapiens. they populated ringworld with homo erectus, but left no predators in the ecology. hence, hominids evolved into every ecological niche. (Vampires, Carrion Eaters, Giant Herbivores, Small Carnivores, some built great technologies and went interstellar. Oh, and ringworld is 300 million times the surface area of earth. post if youre interested, Ill elabortae on native species and alien vistors