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Candlegouger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-13 12:46 PM
There were no votes a second ago, then I voted 2/5, and now it has a rating of 2.67...

Please let other people decide how to rate your submissions. Then, pat yourself on the back for thier praise, not your own ego stroking.

Moving on...

You mention that the kobold forging the scimitar is unusual, and I agree, but why did he do it? You need to fill that out. The friend who still wields it, is a drow or hates drow, I can't tell from your description. I doubt many people here know what a shadow fiend is, I know I don't. This must be a powerful kobold to forge swords and imbue them with magic. Why did he do all this anyway?

The sword is a upside, but the powers aren't really overpowerful, as long as they have limits. How long can you stay invisible? If it's unlimited, it is unbalanced. Infrared is kind of a munchkin/ rules lawyer kind of thing, but not that important.

I do commend you for not useing any system specific stats, good job there. As the sword is, I can use it in any game.

2/5 Go to Comment
Candlegouger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-15 04:55 AM
Think of this as a starting off point. Now that you see what we like and don't like, use that advice in your next post, and maybe come back here sometime and work this up again.

And kick your friend in the shin. Go to Comment
Candlegouger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-27 05:17 PM
This is both a big step forward and backward.

You have fleshed out more of the motives behind the creation of the weapon and taken away details that didn't help and confused the nature of the item. Good work, but I assume you have some personal reason for using a kobold, a race not thought highly of in the art of magic or weapons smithy, to be the creator of this weapon.

In all the changes you've made, you've made a great deal of simple spelling errors. Fix those and you'll get a better rating.

Currently - 3/5 Go to Comment
Aether Song
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-13 12:55 PM
Nice backstory, Nothing overpowerful, although, I really don't see this in the hands of adventurers. It would have to something that would fall into use by kingdom or world builders.

5/5 Go to Comment
The Attatched
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-13 12:50 PM
I went ahead and gave this a 5/5 even though we all know that the teletubbies and barney already have this effect on anyone under 4. ;)

Good work. I love it. Go to Comment
Shadows Revenge
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-11 04:29 PM
See above, but witout the multiple personalities.

It has the beginning of a story, but needs more detail, like why was he stealing from a matron mother of a drow house? Was he just stupid? How did this cloak come into being anyway?

1/5 Go to Comment
Carried on the back of a dove
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Agar's comment on 2004-06-06 12:05 AM
A Swanmay is somewhere in between a Druid and a Were-Swan. (Ack! I've been bit by a swan! Now I am surely cursed!)

I like the story but would like some more fleshed out, like what Columbia was doing captured if she could turn into a pidgeon.

4/5 Go to Comment
Phoenix Feed
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-05-31 01:02 AM
Hot wings! Get your hot wings here!

Chaos ensues. I like it. 4/5 Go to Comment
HearthStone
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-05-11 01:51 PM
Since the Hearthstones have to be enchanted to a spot, you would only be able to find them at waystations and other well travelled camping spots. The flaming discus is out, but the interrogation device could still work, just more vlad the impaler style.

Imagine a holy city with intricatly carved stone courtyards. Invading army comes to strike down the 'heratics'. Army enters courtyard, a single word is spoken, army falls. Cooool. 8)

5/5 Go to Comment
Hillbreaker
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-05-08 09:28 PM
I imagine Clan Ironspirit are giant northmen, and as such, can go about hacking apart shrubbery lined terraces at whim.

I like it. Very colorful and balanced.

5/5 Go to Comment
The Window of the Mind
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Cursed)
Agar's comment on 2004-05-04 12:55 AM
I would have pointed that out five minutes earlier, but I saw I needed to go to the bathroom. ;) Go to Comment
Kerchief Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-05-01 02:39 AM
I can understand how the blade can be concealed in the kerchief, I can only imagine the flaws some of the prototypes and knock-offs might have. Who wants to blow thier nose and get a blade jammed a couple of inches into thier face?

4/5 Go to Comment
The Shroud of Ster
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-25 03:38 PM
They still suffer the effects of starvation and dehydration because that is the cursed part of the item. They can live without it, but they still suffer.

As for what wound they could take, bricks, stones, ropes and good ol' fists are not metal or wood.

This isn't my best, I might even move it to flesh it out. I just felt the need to lead by example. Go to Comment
Elixir of Courage
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-13 11:39 AM
A good item. Solid history, double edged effect, not overpowerful. Very good job!

5/5 Go to Comment
Claw of the heart
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-13 11:35 AM
Agar sez ...

Pirate Penguin, if you don't have anything to say about WHY you did or didn't like the post, DON'T comment! Post WHAT you didn't like about the item, so that we can all see the issues you have. Just saying it wasn't good doesn't help anything.

I am in agreement with Capt, puctuation-wise, I didn't see the spelling problem, but whatever.

I would like to know a few things. First off, what is this "sympathy" spell it can cast on itself, I've never heard of it. Also, how did it become cursed? Was it once good and became tainted, or was it made to be cursed?

3/5 Go to Comment
Whiteblade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-13 11:48 AM
*looks up from his new "Eyesight Abnormality Table"*

I can definiatly see this becoming really addictive, especally in the hands of elderly royalty. Another potential drawback would be that illusions would now be seen with perfect clarity, and since nothing has shadows now, would be rather hard to discren.

4/5 Go to Comment
Potion of Mis Understanding Languages
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-13 11:52 AM
Oh man, I'd completely forgotten about your translator manfred! And the two are so very alike. LOL! My apologies.

It is interesting how the Translator of Political Corectness gets the PCs in bad situations by making bad comunication good, and the Potion of Mis Understanding Languages does that by making good comunication bad.

Now if I can just figure out a way to get the translator to drink the potion... Go to Comment
Helspar
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-05 09:04 PM
I suppose as long as the other metals in the alloy can withstand the tremendous heat of forging Helspar, it would be possible, but aside from it's inherent heat, Helspar is a poor metal. It's soft and doesn't hold an edge unless forged, and it is rather expensive, due to the difficulty of mining it. Go to Comment
Helspar
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-06 02:35 AM
An expensive but useful item. Treasured by civic officials.

The same thing could be used to cut blocks of ice, then the flat of the ice knife could be used to melt the seams together. Ice fort anyone? Go to Comment
Demano Demois
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Agar's comment on 2004-04-03 07:42 PM
I agree with Capt, I'd like a couple more details.

Good job on capitalisation and punctuation, it really adds to your post and makes it easier to read and enjoy. :)

Your description does a better job of painting your rod's appearance than ascii art. It does sound like it looks like a sword out of Tenchi Muyo, though.

This has power, that might not help, and cost that might not hurt. For example, a female half elf fighter would likely use this to beat door to door salesmen. Go to Comment
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