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Claymore of a mourning son
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-24 06:39 PM
thank you for the comment. You understood my writing and for that I am happy. I see though that I did not completely create the story and I will fix it. Go to Comment
Claymore of a mourning son
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Abock's comment on 2006-09-27 07:32 PM
Updated: OK.....I spent a few days away from this piece to try and get a clear mind. I think I may have accomplished what was fowling this story. Check it out and let me know...Thanks Go to Comment
The Great White Dragon
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Mountains)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-18 08:22 PM
Updated: I hope this is a little better. I think I'm getting better and soon you guys will see some great compositions from me. The ideas never stop coming haha Go to Comment
The Great White Dragon
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Abock's comment on 2006-09-19 05:05 PM
Updated: I must go and it need more revising but i think this is considerably better. Take a look Go to Comment
The Great White Dragon
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Abock's comment on 2006-09-19 07:11 PM
Updated: Okay Ive done what I feel is a good job. I made it a little religious and ethically based to explain more of the past and present of the dragon. Hope you enjoy Go to Comment
The Great White Dragon
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Abock's comment on 2006-09-19 02:33 PM
Okay, thank you I will take your ideas and work on it. Although I also like the image I gave the dragons scale.A story is never satisfying to me unless it is completely understood and liked by everyone who is willing to help. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-17 05:14 PM
Thank you for your honest opinion. After all i am here to become a better writer. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-17 05:40 PM
Updated: Updated: I think this is a better explanation of my lifeform and his creation. Im glad you guys are brutally honest, it makes me a better writer. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-17 06:56 PM
thank you,
I regret to inform you that I am a native but only a senior in highschool. Everything you said helped me greatly though I will continue to work on it. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-18 05:58 PM
Updated: I will revise it again when I return but for now I think this is much better. If you read this within the next 3 hours go easy on me until I get back okay thanks. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Abock's comment on 2006-09-18 07:11 PM
Updated: Okay I hope this is better. I personally really like this piece now and can take pride in the story, maybe not the writing, but the idea is enjoyable. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
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Abock's comment on 2006-09-19 02:20 PM
Thank you very much for your advice. I will try to catagorize things better next time. When I found this sight I was looking for a place to practice and learn from better writers; So my attitude is about learning as much as you will teach me. Go to Comment
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