thank you for the comment. You understood my writing and for that I am happy. I see though that I did not completely create the story and I will fix it. Go to Comment
Updated: OK.....I spent a few days away from this piece to try and get a clear mind. I think I may have accomplished what was fowling this story. Check it out and let me know...Thanks Go to Comment
Updated: I hope this is a little better. I think I'm getting better and soon you guys will see some great compositions from me. The ideas never stop coming haha Go to Comment
Updated: Okay Ive done what I feel is a good job. I made it a little religious and ethically based to explain more of the past and present of the dragon. Hope you enjoy Go to Comment
Okay, thank you I will take your ideas and work on it. Although I also like the image I gave the dragons scale.A story is never satisfying to me unless it is completely understood and liked by everyone who is willing to help. Go to Comment
Updated: Updated: I think this is a better explanation of my lifeform and his creation. Im glad you guys are brutally honest, it makes me a better writer. Go to Comment
thank you,
I regret to inform you that I am a native but only a senior in highschool. Everything you said helped me greatly though I will continue to work on it. Go to Comment
Updated: I will revise it again when I return but for now I think this is much better. If you read this within the next 3 hours go easy on me until I get back okay thanks. Go to Comment
Updated: Okay I hope this is better. I personally really like this piece now and can take pride in the story, maybe not the writing, but the idea is enjoyable. Go to Comment
Thank you very much for your advice. I will try to catagorize things better next time. When I found this sight I was looking for a place to practice and learn from better writers; So my attitude is about learning as much as you will teach me. Go to Comment
Items (Melee Weapons) (Cursed)